Narrative-first, evidence-driven

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Use when: agencies ask for comments on proposed rules, permits, plans, or enforcement changes.
Goal: get a clear request into the official record, in a form agencies can use.

Why this matters

Rules and enforcement shape reality more than speeches do.

The comment structure (short)

1. Stake: who you are + how it affects you
2. Position: support/oppose specific provision
3. Evidence: 2–3 bullets (observed impact, data, implementation reality)
4. Fix: change A → B (one ask)
5. Metric: what to track + how often to publish
6. Close: confirm it’s in the record

Tips

• Be concrete: timelines, staffing, reporting
• Avoid speculation
• One credible source beats five angry links

What success looks like

Your comment is received and referenced. A rule changes, or a reporting requirement gets added.

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